Blog 12

Going in to the editing of m Literacy narrative, I was looking forward to changing quite a bit in my paper to make it have more the focus the original assignment asked for. Now, a week after handing it in, I don't think I changed enough. My whole conclusion was basically stripped and redone. I ditched the whole "writing proclamation" last paragraph and really built up the problem's that I have. I'm happy with this change. However, where I should have more clearly stated my focus throughout the body of my paper, I simply made simple modifications to different sentences and themes. I still think my paper works and is good, but not good enough. I'm sure it's clear I'm very constricted about it.